Final Shot Revisions
KEY: Priority—must be done by Monday
Important—must be done ASAP
Secondary—would help the motion, but not crucial for
story
Picky—would only serve to make our film look more
professional; categories include: POPS, BLINKS, C’s HAIR, and M’s GLOVES; *’s are the more glaring issues within the sub-categories
Greenlit—finished, even with all of the
other criteria considered
INTRO100 – Nick>>Aaron>>Nick
-get rid of the big jerk in the beginning (Cuervo)
-POPS: -*M’s left arm towards the end when lifting the glass
-*C’s right hand when first shaping the bell
-C’s right elbow midway through shaping the bell
-C’s left elbow just before he lets go of the instrument at the end
-in C’s instrument after it settles (it moves a little on its own)
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TRUMP1-100 - Nick
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
TRUMP1-200 - Dean>>Nick
-M puts the tool through the table at the end (pretty sure this is buffer—we just need to make sure that it is edited out)
-BLINKS: -some are weird
TRUMP1-300 - Jen>>Irene
-POPS: -C’s right and left elbows just before he hands piece to M—minor
-C’s right elbow just after he hands piece to M—minor
-*C’s left arm after he is done “guarding” piece
-*M’s right elbow just before he “beckons”
-M’s body and right arm as he approaches
-BLINKS: -C should blink more at big stuff (ruler, M’s approach)
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
TRUMP1-400 - Daniel
TRUMP1-500 - Rachel>>Jesse
-POPS: -*C’s head nod is snappy
-M’s right elbow in beginning and the end
-*M’s left arm as it sets the piece down
-BLINKS: -M could blink more in the beginning
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
-M’s GLOVES: Left
Easy TRUMP1-600 - Irene
-POPS: -*M’s left arm near the beginning
-M’s right arm/shoulder as he begins to walk
-BLINKS: -M’s blinks pop open too fast
Easy TRUMP1-700 -
-M’s GLOVES: Left
TRUMP1-800 - Jesse
-make tool stick more during widening
-more finger motion on C (especially on table)
-POPS: -snap during transition from widening to shaping
-*C’s left arm as he puts tool down
-C’s left arm before he rests it on the table
-*C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the “problem hair” on his left side
-*M’s GLOVES: Left
TRUMP1-900 - Jesse
TRUMP1-1000 - Dean>>Nick/Irene>>Nick
-change C’s pose in the beginning to one of interest, not boredom (toned down version of 800)
-C should become more interested/happy when M approves (make approval clear), and then become disappointed when he hears the sound of the piece
-C’s body reacts too harshly to the sound of the instrument
-M should give one distinct nod of approval (see T1-600) after he faces C—too much unclear head movement at this point (before playing the piece)
-change M at the end so that he is not staring into space, but at C (looks up front as he points, but then looks at and kind of subtly follows C’s motion)—end the shot with him looking in C’s general direction slightly to his right)
-work on C getting up—he looks as though he braces himself, but he does it on thin air, not the table or chair
-C looks as though he uses the piece to help him get up—adjust the weight shift so that it is in the center and he doesn’t need a hand to help him get up
-have M point quicker and play the piece longer
-the point should be more direct and linear (quicker)
-penetration between M’s face and the piece in the beginning
-have M open his mouth a little before blowing into the instrument
-the way C swings the instrument as he leaves is too fast
-M’s head should be looking at C when he hands the instrument to him, then turn as he points (turns too early)
-M’s arms are weird at the end (gunslinger)
-Camera: pull back a little; don’t pan so far to the right (M’s pointing arm should be more in profile and less foreshortened)
-match body/head/facial of M to next shot (there is a time right after the point that is close)
-hold the smile until the end
-neutral expression as he watches C get up and step behind, then a smile at C’s seat after C is behind him
-M’s facial expression is really static—should be approving (without really smiling) when he does the head nod, stern but not angry when he points, and transform into a very subtle smile (without teeth—see T1-1100) after C is behind his back
-POPS: -C’s left shoulder as he gets up
-*M’s pointing arm is snappy as it moves into position
-*M’s left elbow pops as he points
-M’s right arm pops when he is putting the ruler away
-M’s right arm is jittery after putting the ruler away
-**instrument pops during transfer between M’s hands
-instrument pops a little during transfer from M to C
-*C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the hairs near the back of his neck
-*M’s GLOVES: Left
Easy TRUMP1-1100 - Irene
-M looking in C’s direction matched to previous shot
-smile is good, just make extra sure that we see it very well
-more of a transition to change of expression (see me)
-lead with the eyes when he looks down
-add C leaving screen right
-start the shot in the smile position
-have M turn his head to screen right after C leaves the frame, keep the smile for a little bit, then change the expression
-eyes move down a little too fast
-work on transition
-the drop of the head and change of expression at the end need to be accelerated—the slowness makes him look sad
Easy TRUMP1-1200 -
-POPS: -jittery head on C
-*BLINKS: -there are none
-C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the “problem hair” on his left side
Easy BADT100 - Eugene>>Aaron>>Irene
-facial expression of C’s “decision”—make sure that it is held long enough to be clear (hold an extra 15 frames at the end)
-during the ending facial expression, tilt the position of the glass so that it matches the next shot
-move piece away from his mouth to make sure that expression is clear
-get rid of the left arm grabbing the tool which isn’t there
-make the first smile when looking at the piece an expression of boredom
-*BLINKS: -there are practically none
-C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the “problem hair” on his left side
BADT200 - Dean>>Nick
-match C to previous shot
-C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the hairs near the back of his neck
BADT300 - Dean>>Aaron>>Nick
-soften the neck jerk nod
-slow the hopping
-get rid of the weird arm left arm thing
-there is a lot of distracting popping where the left arm thing used to be
-POPS: -in piece near the beginning (a couple)
-*in right elbow (2-3 in a row in middle of shot)
-**throughout the shot
-*BLINKS: -there are none—really needs them
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
DISP100 - Dean>>Nick
-facial expression should quickly “sink” from happiness to shock and disappointment
-*BLINKS: -there are none
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
DISP200 - Dean
DISP300 - Eugene>>Nick
-match M’s facial expression to next shot
-POPS: -*M’s arms
-C’s shoulders—minor
-BLINKS: -M needs one
DISP400 - Jen
DISP500 - Jen>>Aaron
-change the grin so that it starts smaller and gets close to where it is now
-lips are moving around really strangely
-*BLINKS: -there are none
Easy DISP600 - Eugene>>Nick
-POPS: -M has jittery head
DISP700 - Eugene>>Nick
-POPS: -*jitters
Easy DISP800 - Aaron>>Irene
-C’s HAIR: *turn on jiggle
Easy DISP900 - Dinh>>Jesse
-POPS: -slight one in left arm just after turning and another after stepping—minor
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
Easy DISP1000 - Dinh>>Jesse
-POPS: -*a few in M’s arms
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
DISP1100 - Rachel>>Jesse
-POPS: -*snappy motion (head mostly)
DISP1200 - Nick
AMAN100 - Dinh>>Jesse
-POPS: -*snappy instrument
-BLINKS: -final one is too fast
Easy AMAN200 - Dinh>>Jesse
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
Easy AMAN300 - Dinh>>Jesse
-POPS: -jittery torso near the end
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
AMAN400 - Daniel>>Jesse
-quicker punches to show anger
Easy AMAN500 - Dinh>>Jesse
-POPS: -C’s left elbow during the sigh
-torso slightly jittery during the sigh
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
AMAN600 - Aaron>>Irene
-POPS: -*torso/belly? in the beginning for M
-*arm that grabs the piece is snappy while grabbing
-*M’s feet/legs during the walk
-*BLINKS: -there are none
Easy AMAN700 - Aaron>>Irene
-POPS: -C’s torso/root pops forward near the end
Easy AMAN800 - Aaron>>Irene
-get rid of C’s cheesy smile at the end
-replace it with a slight nod and a look of “I respect you, even though I don’t agree with you.”(see me)
-POPS: -*C’s right arm/shoulder in the beginning
Easy AMAN900 - Aaron>>Irene
-M’s movement of the piece (Bad T) is weird
-POPS: -M’s right arm at the very end
Easy AMAN1000 - Aaron>>Irene
-POPS: -C’s left arm/shoulder near the end
-*M’s GLOVES: Right
AMAN1100 - Aaron>>Irene
-POPS: -*C’s right arm right after grabbing the piece
-C’s shoulder folding while grabbing
-*C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the hairs near the back of his neck
Easy AMAN1200 - Jen>>Daniel>>Jesse
-POPS: -C’s left arm/shoulder while playing the piece for the first time
-C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the “problem hair” on his left side
Easy AMAN1300 - Irene
-slow down the motion so that the edit does not cut it off so abruptly (may need to add a little time to do this—okay because we are compensating for the loss of 1400)
-*C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
AMAN1400 - Irene
-cut
AMAN1500 - Jen>>Aaron
-extend a little to allow us to see his anger longer (1/2 second)
-maybe a little head shake before transition of expression
DUEL100 - Daniel>>Jesse
-POPS: -*C’s right hand in the beginning is jittering
-*BLINKS: -there are none
-C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the “problem hair” on his left side
DUEL200 - Rachel>>Jesse
-POPS: -C’s left arm moves to rub his right arm in a weird way—too quick
-*C’s paper doll shoulder
-*C’s right arm hyper-extends before his piece is set down
-*M’s right arm is twisting/popping a lot in the beginning
-C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the “problem hair” on his left side
DUEL300 - Aaron
-begin the shot with a look of trying to contain himself rather than a smile
-then, transition into anger
-see Barbara for greenlit status
-match C’s head position from previous shot—he is already looking at M—but make sure that we can clearly see his facial expression
-*BLINKS: -there are none
DUEL400 - Rachel
Easy DUEL500 - Dinh>>Aaron>>Irene
-M’s arm is floaty
-raise M’s R arm a little to match prev. shot
-POPS: -in piece
-in M’s head near the end
DUEL600 - Rachel>>Aaron>>Irene
-C’s eyes roll around at the end of the shot
-POPS: -C’s head in beginning as he turns
-M’s head as the piece comes to him pops down
-M is jittery (head mostly)
DUEL700 - Dinh>>Aaron>>Irene
-add forearm movement
-a little quicker motion to show anger
Easy DUEL800 – Daniel>>Jesse
-C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
-M’s GLOVES: Left
Easy DUEL900 - Daniel>>Jesse
-C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
-M’s GLOVES: Left
Easy DUEL1000 - Daniel>>Jesse
-C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
-M’s GLOVES: Left
Easy DUEL1100 – Daniel>>Jesse
-C’s HAIR: turn on jiggle
TRUMP2-100 – Nick
TRUMP2-200 - Nick
Easy TRUMP2-300 - Nick
-POPS: -*M’s head too fast at the end
-*BLINKS: -needs more
Easy FIND100 - Nick
-new hair on Jill
-*BLINKS: -there are none
-C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the hairs near the back of his neck
FIND200 - Irene
-eyes need to look around a little
-less head turn as she closes the door (keeps looking forward basically)
-POPS: -*right arm in beginning and as it closes the door
-*left arm several times
-head
-BLINKS: -might be too quick
FIND300 - Irene
-POPS: -some arm pops
-slight twitch in lower body before the turn
FIND400 - Daniel
FIND500 - Irene>>Aaron>>Irene
-shift her weight onto her left leg for her second-to-last step
-POPS: -*arms pop a couple of times while she turns/walks
-lessen the head movements a little
-check with me/Barbara for which one to use (yours or Aaron’s)
FIND600 - Irene
-floaty (in her arms as she is admiring it mostly)
-floaty head
-work on the left hand so that it stays on the piece and does not intersect
-work on finger motion (right hand mostly)
-back moves weird when she plays instrument
-POPS: -*left hand
-right elbow/shoulder
-BLINKS: -might be too quick
Easy BUY050 – Jesse
-POPS: -M’s head as he turns
BUY100 & 200 – Daniel>>Jesse
-C’s right hand penetrates counter a couple times
-some subtle finger motion for
C—looks too frozen sometimes
-change the hand on face thing?
-POPS: -J’s right shoulder as M approaches with his piece
-*M’s body “rocks” throughout
-*BLINKS: -all characters need more
-*C’s HAIR: paint the weight off of the “problem hair” on his left side
-*M’s GLOVES: Right and Left
Easy BUY300 - Jen>>Irene
-C needs facial
-POPS: -C pops and snaps a few times
-*BLINKS: -add to C with his facial
BUY400 - Daniel
END100 - Nick
-something on Wife Beater’s wrist to cover problem
-POPS: -*some popping/strange translation in hands
Easy END200 - Nick
-new hair on Wife Beater
-something on Wife Beater’s wrist to cover problem
-POPS: Wife Beater’s arm as he walks away
END300 – Jesse
-work in progress
-add new customers
-animate the creation of the piece
-insert new glass pieces
-facial
-hand interactions
-take out rug, wood crate, and some of the unformed glass (to make room for the Old T’s)
-M turns his head too fast towards C at the end
-both characters’ hands kind of slide along the table while bracing
-work on facial some more—M mostly
-POPS: -*C’s motion while shaping the lip is jerky
-*C comes to a stop kind of stiffly in beginning